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Graduated College, Government Resume Help Needed
December 7, 2010 at 7:29 pm #117393
Alan RaismanParticipantHi everyone,
I graduated last May with a Bachelor of Arts degree from Lafayette College, majoring in Government and Law as well as International Affairs. I am looking to enter into government, but my resume is that of a college graduate, not of a government employee. If you can look at it and critique it, I would greatly appreciate it. To give you a little background about my experiences in government, please read below. My primary focus has been in local government.
While at Lafayette College, I helped establish a group to create greater town-gown relations between Lafayette College and the community in Easton, PA. In the fall of my sophomore year, I started a research project called One Word – One City; I asked the people of Easton to describe their home in one word in an attempt to understand the community and those who lived there. I was asked to present my research at Easton City Council, Easton’s chapter of the Pennsylvania Weed and Seed, and the Arts Community of Easton. My understanding of the community and the people of Easton grew quickly, and I continued to attend Easton City Council meetings for the following two years as well as sitting on both the Community Restoration Committee and the Safety Committee of Easton’s Weed and Seed.
In order to create a more personal relationship with the people of Easton, I became the first Lafayette College student volunteer with Easton’s Main Street program and the first student member of the Easton Environmental Advisory Council. I also served as the secretary of the College Hill Neighborhood Association for one year, the first Lafayette College student to sit on their Executive Committee. My committee roles offered me the opportunity to engage with the Departments of Public Works, Economic Development, and Planning for the city of Easton, PA.
Because of my One Word – One City project, I learned how the people in Easton see not only their community but their government, and I wanted to help reengage the people of Easton with their elected officials. In addition to attending over fifty Easton, PA City Council meetings, I served as an intern for Pennsylvania State Senator Rob Wonderling. When he resigned to serve as the CEO of the Greater Philadelphia Chamber of Commerce, I was asked to join his successor, State Senator Bob Mensch, as an intern in the spring of my senior year. I met with numerous Easton residents about their concerns, and because of my outreach, I brought several Easton residents to their first City Council meeting. In November 2007, it was suggested that I attend a Running for Local Government workshop by the Lehigh Valley League of Women Voters, and I was asked by several Easton residents to run for City Council; I declined since I could not commit a four year term. I am seeking a full-time job in Easton, Harrisburg, and D.C. If I do find one in Easton, I have already been encouraged to try to run for City Council in 2012.
In the summer of 2009, I also served as an intern with the International Center of the National Institute of Justice, Office of Justice Programs, U.S. Department of Justice. Before I graduated Lafayette College last May, I was presented with the Service Above Self Award from Lafayette College as well as a Certificate of Recognition from Easton’s City Council. My focus throughout my life has been engagement, bringing people from around together to interact with one another. I served as a Motivational Speaker on three People to People Leadership Summits, speaking to over 600 students from 40 countries about relationship building and international understanding; I have traveled to thirty countries since 2000 promoting the same message.
January 22, 2011 at 11:01 pm #117400
I took a look at your resume and made several changes to the formatting (deleting all the section breaks and standardizing the margins throughout) as well as adding several comments. I also hid your personal details on this version, to protect your privacy. The majority of what you are listing is fine and in many places you have gotten right to the heart of the matter by including the details — usually numbers — that help a reader visualize you at work.
My major suggestion is that you add a first section to indicate what your objective is. If the reader can’t tell up front that you are a good fit for a position, you are making it too hard and your resume not get the attention it deserves.
You included a lot of good information in your statement about your background — good material to use in a cover letter to help lead the reader to your resume. But keep in mind that often the cover letter and the resume will get separated — or you’ll have to upload the information from your resume to an on-line application where there is no opporttunity to include that cover letter.
Look at a couple of the other postings on this topic — What are Your Resume Recommendations by Gov Loop (Steve Ressler), and if you are interested in federal employment, Rocking Resources: Understanding the Federal Hiring Process, and Resume Reviewer: Robin Schlinger’s comments.
January 26, 2011 at 7:54 pm #117397
Alan, I will try to help you you rebuild this resume. Attached is how I would have the language at the top be worded.
This is just a beginning.
Besides being an editor, I am also a remote Mandarin coach I am looking for people in the government and military who can tell me to who I could present my availability. I am looking for people who use the language professionally who could use some help from someone such as myself.
I have advertised this stuff to the White House, to the Academies, to the DOD and the DOS, etc. Some Spanish too.
My accent when I speak in Mandarin is from the North of China (mildly Beijing) and it is very standard, accepted, and native-like.
I am very patient when I work with people.
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