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Rock My Resume: Aarion Browne
February 9, 2012 at 7:26 pm #152685
I would like my resume reviewed because the majority of my experience has come from a retail or a sales environment yet I want a government position. I would like a professional to review my skills and help me organize them in a way that I will get noticed. I am currently employed (retail banking middle management) but I am actively seeking employment in hopes of leaving this position, and possibly the profession, behind. I have submitted numerous resumes online and even mailed one or two. The issue that I am encountering the most is a lack of “call-backs”. When I do get a response, it is usually “you fit the criteria but there are other candidates who are more qualified”.
Here is a link to one job that I would like: https://my.usajobs.gov/GetJob/ViewDetails/308430800
February 9, 2012 at 8:01 pm #152698
February 9, 2012 at 9:45 pm #152696
Thanks for submitting your resume and for following our new process. You’re in the queue for a professional review in February!
February 28, 2012 at 6:46 pm #152694
Thank you for your reply. How will I be alerted when my resume has been reviewed?
February 28, 2012 at 8:13 pm #152692
Either Paul or Camille will reply right to this discussion with feedback. You can either check back here periodically or set your notifications so you get an email when someone responds.
March 27, 2012 at 12:15 pm #152690
I can tell you made a few changes between the original resume you uploaded and the second version you created after reading through our guidelines. Here are a few suggestions for going forward.
- Do not use tables or templates in Microsoft Word to format your resume.
- Rebecca Laszlo’s name appears at the bottom of all your pages.
- Delete “Additional Work History Available Upon Request.” You MUST give them all the important information on your professional experience.
The other thing that will help your presentation is to use a “modified chronological” format. This is a hybrid version of the functional and chronological that is organized in reverse chronological order, but has subsections focused on the skills sets the employer has said they need.
Strategic Planning and Policy Development
Communications and Recruitment
- Develop strategic plan for new one-person career development office, monitor program budget, and serve on Executive Committee for school that has grown by 80% in 3 years.
- Identify career development needs of 450 MPA, MPP, and PhD students, implement appropriate programs and services, and offer support to 3200 alumni. Approximately 95% of all alumni are employed six months after graduation.
- Establish systems to ensure seamless coordination with Student Disability Services, Counseling Services, and International Services Office to help clients with special physical, mental, emotional, and legal needs.
- Evaluate financial aid process for graduate students and collaborate with upper management to review and develop process to decrease waiting time to receive confirmation with purpose of increasing student recruitment and retention.
That kind of bullet point pulls together the skill sets he used (developing, implementing, creating), what/who/how/why he did these things, and his accomplishments. And it focuses the employer’s attention on those skills sets the employ said it needed. It also gives much more context to the employer and the sense that my student’s work had a much broader impact.Also, you need to look at your descriptions from the perspective of the person reading your resume and ask yourself these questions: “So what? Is this what I need?” Most of what you have written now would not give them what they need.
- Develop employer outreach strategy and marketing plan, requiring relationship and network building in all sectors and publication of the first brochure sent to over 5,000 contacts around the world.
- Customize and administer, in conjunction with director, the web-based career management system, which gives student and alumni 24-hour access to job and internship announcements, an event calendar, employer contacts, and career-related documents.
Avoid using verbs like conduct, perform, administer, support, assist, maintain, or the really old and tired phrase “responsibilities included.” Those are really passive verbs and don’t give you nearly as much credit as you deserve. Try to start each bullet point with an action verb that is the exact same word as you found in the job description.
Whenever you find it hard to avoid starting your bullet points with “Assisted” or “Helped,” break down what you did into manageable parts that you can describe. Everything you do relates to a skill set that an employer will find useful as long as you present it as such.
Finally, it is important that the last sub-section of every position description be a “Key Accomplishments” section. Federal HR professionals like to see a section that highlights you key accomplishments for every position. These accomplishments can be awards, recognitions, commendations, and even a retelling of those things your mentioned in the sub-sections above the Key Accomplishments.
April 10, 2012 at 9:37 pm #152688
We hope you found this service helpful! Since we offer this service for free, we just ask that participants post their newly made-over resumes for all to see and learn from (step 10! https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions). It is a really valuable resources for others trying to update their own resumes to have a couple great samples to use.
We’d really appreciate it if you could update your resume based on Paul’s feedback and post to this discussion!
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