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Rock My Resume By Aurora
February 22, 2012 at 7:13 pm #153998
My goal is to acquire and advance a career in the local or federal government agency.
My main concern is to improve and polish my resume so that the chances of getting a job interview
are greater. I need your assistance in reviewing and editing my current resume. Thank you so much.
February 23, 2012 at 6:07 pm #154013
We're excited you got the Rock Your Resume Process started! If you could reply with a link to a job you're interested in and complete steps 6 and 7 (https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions), we can get you in the queue for a professional review! Just reply to this discussion with your "Edit1" when you're ready.
March 9, 2012 at 11:57 pm #154010
Thank you for replying back. I'm interested in securing an administrative assistant job or an entry level position at a local or federal government. Please reference the attached document for my edited resume.
Thank you so much!
March 13, 2012 at 6:52 pm #154008
Thanks Aurora - you're now in the queue for a free professional review!
We'd just ask for your patience as our reviewers get to your resume, as the demand for this free service has been enormous! One of our expert reviewers will respond right to this discussion thread with feedback, once they've reviewed it.
May 20, 2012 at 3:17 am #154005
Andrea Boulanger LoweParticipant
Thanks for submitting your resume! To make it an even more effective federal resume, here are some tips.
1) You’ll want to make sure you take care of the federal compliance information which includes the following:
- Soc sec #, veteran’s preference, country of citizenship, availability, desired locations, and objective (the position name, agency, vacancy number)
- Within each work experience, make sure to include the hours per week that you worked, salary, supervisor’s name and phone number, and whether or not they can contact that supervisor
2) Rather than a Career Objective, make it a Career Summary and tailor it to the specific position. To do that, read the QUALIFICATIONS REQUIRED section in the vacancy announcement. This is THE section that you want to make sure you tailor your resume to (another section is the 2nd set of bullets listed under HOW YOU WILL BE EVALUATED). You must speak in the language of the employer. The Summary section of your resume is your opportunity to create a lens through which employers will read your resume. Give them something direct and to the point that will focus their attention on what it is they are about to read. You’ll want to keep it to 3-4 lines. As you are writing your summary, ask yourself “is this relevant to this specific position?”
Here’s an example: “Program analyst with three years of project experience working on teams implementing community development programs, grant writing, and data analysis. Business and organizational development expert with first-hand experience of the Congressional appropriations process and knowledge of effective strategic management practices.”
3) List your education last. Because you have an MPA there might be question as to why you are applying for an admin assistant position. There might be less of a question if that’s the last thing they see.
Only include your MPA and Bachelor’s degree.
4) The 4 sections prior to your job experience aren’t needed. Employers want to see what you did and where. Put this information with your jobs.
5) Use some sort of bullet. A resume is very hard to read without them because they give the eye a rest. Keep it to about 3-7 bullets for each position. You’re going to want to reduce the information you provide for each of your positions. Your current resume is more of a “master” resume that lists everything you have done. That unfortunately won’t work for employers who are trying to quickly see if you meet their qualifications; the way your resume is written it is as though you are asking them to figure you out which they don’t have time for.
For your bullets you could pick a keyword that gives focus to the content in the bullet. For example, your first bullet in the first position listed it could look like this…
DATA ANALYSIS: Researched, compiled, analyzed data and prepared technical reports relating to water quality and solid waste compliance and programs.
You don’t do your positions justice. In your bullets it should include what skills you used and what the result was. You want to steer away from just writing out your duties but make them into accomplishment statements. What value did you add by being in that position?
I have attached a handout called Anatomy of a Bullet that will hopefully show you how to improve your resume. Also, bullets shouldn’t have a period at the end of them.
6) Have another section called Key Accomplishments where you have a bulleted list of 1-3 statements. The candidate who clearly shows how their work added value at past positions will appear most attractive. Accomplishments are all that separate you from other equally qualified candidates.
If you don’t share how your work affected an organization or how your output was used, they won’t get the full picture. They could be left asking ―So What! After you write each bullet point, ask yourself that question—―So What? What’s the end of the story? And whenever possible, quantify your accomplishments.
Sometimes it’s very hard to come up with an achievement for a bullet point, or you may not have specific percentages of growth or effectiveness. In place of measurable accomplishments, give as much detail as you can. If you used a specific software or theory mention it. Did you consult with secondary AND primary resources for your research? What was the title and purpose of the conference you organized? Were your foreign language abilities necessary to complete the task?
A good tool for writing quality position descriptions is the CAR method:
C = Context
A = Action
R = Result
7) Take a highlighter to the vacancy announcement and identify the most important skills and abilities listed and use those words in your resume as often as possible. By using what the employer identified as the most important aspects of the position, you are giving them exactly what they want. Your resume should convey how your experiences and education are well-suited to the position by using their language. Think of the position announcement as a way to translate your resume into the employer’s language. If you have experience managing events and the position requires someone to ―organize events—you use ―organize events on your resume.
8) Be sure to make sure that your tenses are accurate. Past tense for jobs in the past, and present only for your current job.
9) In your computer and technical skills make sure that it includes your typing speed as that is listed as a required skills.
10) No need to include References available upon request. Of course they are 🙂
Good luck with your job search!
May 20, 2012 at 7:42 pm #154003
Thank you Andrea!! I appreciate your time and effort on editing and reviewing my resume. Once I make changes in my resume, I will send you a copy. Please feel free to critique my resume. I look forward to receiving your feedback. Thank you for providing the Anatomy of Bullet Point attachment.
May 21, 2012 at 1:43 pm #154001
We hope you found this service helpful! Since we offer this service for free, we just ask that participants post their newly made-over resumes for all to see and learn from (step 10! https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions). It's a really valuable resource for others trying to update their own resumes to have a couple great samples to use. We'd really appreciate it if, when you update your resume based on Andrea's feedback, you would post to this discussion!
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