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Rock My Resume: Eric Ferraro
February 6, 2012 at 2:31 pm #152072
After 7 years in industry, and before that 20 years as a Naval Officer, I've been a government employee for the last 6 1/2 years in the same job. Great job which I enjoy, but I plan to work for another 10+ years at least and would like new challenges and new opportunities.
Currently a DP 4, which is a GS14-GS15 payband, so I'm looking for a senior GS15 or SES position.
Recently interviewed with GSA, but not selected. Here's an example of a job I'd be interested in:
USAJOBS Announcement: GSA 12110051 or VA SES-12-595940-JJ
Not sure my resume shows enough breadth and depth of experience at the Enterprise Level or if I provide enough results in my current position.
Thanks in advance for any help/suggestions.
February 9, 2012 at 9:15 pm #152091
We're glad you got the process started! Once you've completed steps 1-7 in the instructions (https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions - looks like only 2 more to go for you!), we'll get you in the queue for review.
February 23, 2012 at 3:06 pm #152088
Eric Ferrare EDIT 1
February 23, 2012 at 5:45 pm #152086
Hi Eric - thanks for submitting your updated resume. You are now in the queue for a professional review!
April 18, 2012 at 5:51 am #152084
Thank you for participating in the Rock Your Résumé program! I hope my comments will be helpful to you.
Your résumé begins with a short qualifications section. I would recommend replacing this with a strong profile section that tells the employer what you can do for them that is directly related to their needs. Their needs are usually outlined generously in the job announcement, specifically, in the duties section. I recommend that you identify the key words and requirements and write at least two sentences that address their top 4-5 needs which is usually the first 4-5 sentences on the job announcement. You should have a customized profile section for each position you apply to that demonstrates how your expertise matches the expertise they are seeking. SES is all about leadership. Make sure your résumé ensures defines you as a leader.
I recommend placing the headings over the text rather than to the side. That is a lot of precious résumé real estate wasted under the headings to the side. I would take your name out of the header and just have it be regular text on the page. Take the first 2-3 bullets of each job block and create a paragraph instead. Then, list bullets below that. This just breaks up the text a bit and makes the format more enticing to read.
When applying to SES, be sure to use as many of those keywords from the ECQs throughout résumé by demonstrating examples of each in one way or another, and make sure to use the main 5 ECQ keywords in the core competency list. It is helpful to follow your profile section with a list of your core competencies that reflect key words also included in the announcement.
I understand you are applying for federal employment at the GS 15 and/or SES level so I just have to remind you to be sure to put all the detail that is required in federal résumé, i.e., supervisor’s name and phone number, number of hours worked per week, salary for each position, GPAs, and relevant coursework. When you post your résumé back to the group, you do not have to put the exact information above, but be sure it is on the federal résumé you submit, as well as on the résumé builder. Everything that is asked for in the text fields on the résumé builder is required unless it does not apply to you, so be sure every field is addressed. It is critical to do this in order to make it to the Best/Highest Qualified list.
Your résumé could benefit from using more of an executive format and style. You could take a look at a few of my samples on my website: http://www.ccCareerServices.com. A little color and change of format and style would really help you to stand out—and look more executive. This would be the .doc file that you print and take to the interview as well as upload to the Saved Documents area. Then be sure to make a text file and clean it up for copying and pasting into the online résumé builder on USAJOBS.
I really liked how you quantified your accomplishments! Great job! I would make them stand out more by doing this:
- Met all customer requirements despite 50% reduction in budget authority.
- Saved $1M by eliminating excess contractor support.
- Revamped and improved Navy testing and Navy Marine Corps Intranet deployment strategy.
- Formulated and conducted “Road Show” training events and conferences.
I would separate your civilian and military experience by adding “Civilian Experience” and “Military Experience” as headings.
I noticed some inconsistencies with the date formatting dates and employers. Be consistent with boldface type, font size, dashes vs. “to” for dates, and periods at the ends of sentences, or not, if you wish for no periods, but be consistent either way.
There are several other sections on a federal résumé you might be missing to help you stand out, if they apply to you; for example: Honors & Achievements, Volunteer Service, Training, and Professional Affiliations. Read the announcement very carefully to identify the information they would like on the résumé.
Making the changes mentioned and ensuring the information is transferred accurately to the builder should improve your chances of getting an interview.
Do not forget to copy and paste your profile, skills summary, and any other section on your résumé that does not match the builder headings, into the Additional Information block at the end of the builder. All of those keywords and requirements are great information to have in that field and can be picked up by the builder.
Wishing you the best of luck to you in your job search!
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April 18, 2012 at 2:23 pm #152082
Thanks so much for taking the time to review my resume and the GREAT pointers and tips! I'll definitely re-work my word document to reformat and include your suggestions!
Appreciate the help, and hopefully I'll be starting a new job later this year 🙂
April 24, 2012 at 5:46 pm #152080
We're glad you found this service helpful! Since we offer this service for free, we just ask that participants post their newly made-over resumes for all to see and learn from (step 10! https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions). It is a really valuable resources for others trying to update their own resumes to have a couple great samples to use. We'd really appreciate it if you could update your resume based on Camille's feedback and post to this discussion!
April 30, 2012 at 6:18 pm #152077
This is still a work in progress, but attached is what I have so far.
May 1, 2012 at 1:32 pm #152075
Thanks, Eric! Much appreciated.
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