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Rock My Resume: Glen Forrester
February 2, 2012 at 8:34 pm #151754
I need my resume rocked because I’m currently unemployed and have submitted numerous applications on USAJobs.gov with the usual result being “qualified but not referred”. I worked for Lockheed-Martin for a long time and went back to grad school and received my Masters in history. I have no government experience and choose to emphasize my education and skill qualifications.
This is an example of a job I’ve applied for, I generally try to pursue job opportunities that take advantage of my research/communication skill sets.
February 9, 2012 at 8:48 pm #151773
Glen, just pulling all of your activity into one thread.
Thanks for following the process. You’re in the queue for February!
March 3, 2012 at 7:36 pm #151771
In reviewing your two files, it looks like you are making progress! Hopefully, my comments will help you further. I like the enhancements. Great job!
Let’s work on the content now starting with AREA OF EXPERTISE. I realize that Historian/Research Professional is your area of expertise, but I don’t think it needs to have a heading just for that. I would remove that and rewrite it into your summary.
Under the SUMMARY, and on a résumé in general, there should not be complete sentences. You wrote: “The skill set obtained with a Masters degree in history allows the ability to research and analyze complex issues and to communicate effectively either in oral or written form.” That statement is true, but that doesn’t mean that ‘everyone’ obtained the skill set and leaves one to wonder if you obtained the skill set. Instead how about this for a summary that helps target the Paralegal Specialist announcement:
Consummate historian and research professional with exceptional ability to research and analyze complex issues, including the legal issues that arise in conjunction with handing complex FOIA/PA requests. Exceptional verbal and written communication skills to confer and negotiate with managers and staff, requesters of FOIA/PA legal/policy questions that arise while processing requests, as well as prepare correspondence to substantiate the reasons for denying requests. Competent ability to provide guidance regarding FOIA/PA regulations, disclosure of agency records, exemptions from full or partial disclosure, and confidential business information. Excellent critical thinking and problem-solving skills.
Does this help demonstrate how to address the needs of the employer instead of tell them what skill set should be obtained? I realize it is very specific, but it has to be in order to be effective.
Your core competencies are very good, but be sure to include keywords that fit you, from the job announcement. I would also put them in a column format just to break up the format of ‘paragraphs’ a bit. I see many keywords that you should be using including:
Those are just a few that I identified on the job announcement and the occupational questionnaire. Be sure to preview the occupational questionnaire to identify and refine your qualifications.
Under EDUCATION, may I suggest you spell out M.A. If someone does a search for “Master of Arts degree in _______,” you will have a better chance at “being found.” I’m not guaranteeing that is what will be searched, but Master will most likely yield better results than M.A. Also, why not spell it out? There is plenty of room for it on the line and you earned it. This is my opinion, but to me, this makes more of an impact, and this is how I would write it:
Master of Arts degree in History. University of South Florida, Tampa, Florida. December 2009.
Coursework included: Invasion of North America; Analysis of Historical Knowledge; American Colonial History to 1750, U.S. Migration and Ethnicity in Comparative and Transnational Perspective; Race, Class, and Politics in the U.S.; Gender and Sexuality in U.S. History.
Scored in the 92 percentile on Verbal Reasoning and a 4.5 out of 5? on Analytical Writing on the Graduate Record Exam. Semester hours ____. GPA 3.5.
Do the same with the others as well. Also, include your high school information on the Federal resume as well.
Diploma. _______ High School, city_______, state _____. Graduated (month) ______ (year) ____.
I would put your honor societies in a category called PROFESSIONAL AFFILIATIONS. Then, list any others.
I would probably also move this section and the public speaking section to the end of the résumé to make room for experience next.
It looks the shading behind Work Experience is a different color. Be sure to include on your “real” résumé the following information: Supervisor, May/may not contact, Salary, # of hours worked per week. PLEASE DO NOT include that on the résumé you re-post to this group.
It appears you have been with Lockheed-Martin for quite some time. Yet there are only three bullet points. They are good, but I think it is critical that you show some progression in the company. Think about where you started and how did you get to where you are.
Refurbish and repair legacy military grade electronic defense hardware and systems under time and budget constraints—give an example here of an accomplishment regarding this. (Think about a project—situation—task you were given—action you took—result. Did you save any money? Improve a process? Increase revenue?)
Writing this way will demonstrate your value instead of list your job duties.
I would need to interview you to help you extract this information. Here is a sample from another résumé I have done:
Plan and direct all aspects of Information Technology (IT) support within the boundaries of 13 Eastern States (ES). Integrate best business practices and enhanced IT standards across states. Maintain IT metrics for customers within a $3.2 million annual program.
- Formulate long- and short-range goals for operational IT strategies.
- Define and establish requirements for developmental efforts for strategic field office support and coordination with leadership.
- Provided a transition plan and supervisory oversight for a 3,200 square foot space reduction initiative—accomplished the reduction without service interruption.
- Composed deployment plans for the installation of enhanced telecommuting modules.
- Implemented a performance metric program for Information Technology System Administrators, allowing 100% metrics for tracking and analysis.
- Established a productive coalition among field managers and staffs for better performance values in service standards.
- Composed and activated an intense cross-training program with multiple technology associations to accommodate inadequate staffing support—saved $105,000 in labor hours.
(My bullets didn’t transfer well to this “blog” but I do like to change the common circle bullet style to something different, and change the key accomplishment bullet symbol to something different than the bullet points above it.)
Don’t worry about trying to keep your Federal résumé to two pages. Most are 5-8 pages, but depend on the background, education, and experience. Federal résumé need to include all the details.
I hope this helps you. I look forward to seeing your revised résumé. Please let me know if you have any questions!
Wishing you all the best in your job search endeavors!
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March 6, 2012 at 6:45 pm #151769
We hope you found this service helpful! If so, we’d really appreciate it if you could update your resume based on Camille’s feedback and post to this discussion. It would be a great resource for others trying to update their own resumes to have a couple great samples to use. If you re-post by March 9, you’ll also be in the running for our monthly spotlight for the best resume rocked this month! In addition to getting some great exposure, the winner will also get a $10 Starbucks gift card, to help power through the job application process!
April 11, 2012 at 10:46 pm #151766
First let me take this opportunity to thank you for critiquing my resume on GovLoop, it was extremely helpful! The attached resume is one I plan on using for a position at the Defense Intelligence Agency. I want to use it for job fairs. This the posting number on USAJobs, E12-032661-03-ANA. If it would not be too much of an imposition, could you look at this revision and see if it would be effective and if it’s an improvement on my original. I implemented a great number of your excellent suggestions, my problem with my Lockheed Martin experience is that I foolishly didn’t record or quantify my achievements over the years and also I’m concerned about featuring them too prominently.
Again I appreciate your time and assistance,
April 12, 2012 at 4:59 am #151763
This is a great improvement on the original. Every little bit helps! I did a quick skim of your file and wrote some comments on the résumé. I think your resume could use a splash of color, but I’ve been colorizing resumes for 15 years so for me to see black and white, just reminds me of old typewriter days. We have great technology today and I love to take advantage of it to help my clients stand out.
Because you took the time to make the changes, I would highly recommend you make the changes I suggested on this version, do another cycle, and send it back to me and I will review it again. This process through GovLoop is an educational one where we would like to “teach you (and others) to fish.”
If you would like to take a look at a few of my samples on my web site, and I don’t expect you to copy or replicate them, but just more to give you an idea of how to kick it up a notch. If you want to stand out in the sea of black and white, you really need to STAND OUT! Black and white résumés have been outdated for some time in the careers industry. Check these out and let me know what you think: (specifically the mobile & networking, as well as the federal resume).
April 12, 2012 at 3:25 pm #151760
After looking at your profile on LinkedIn I really wish I could afford to hire you! Any suggestions you have for me I would love to discuss. This is my latest attempt please let me know what you think, I don’t know if it pops enough. Sadly my training is in history, not graphics design! 🙂
April 13, 2012 at 3:20 pm #151757
Thank you for reaching out to me and asking additional résumé, networking, and overall job-search questions. I sympathize with your situation and understand your forté is not graphics design or résumé writing. Mine is not in history so I will have to count on you for history lessons.
I have taken the liberty of incorporating my suggestions into this résumé for you. I hope you find it useful in your job search and hopefully it might help open some interview doors for you. I’m so glad to see you joined LinkedIn as well, and are networking as much as you can. Nothing beats face-to-face networking. Be sure to take advantage of Facebook and Twitter as well. Cast your net wide and you will most likely get a great catch. You are great! I’m confident you will find something soon!
Please let me know how you like the résumé. I’m sure you can take it from here.
Sending you lots of good luck and optimistic job hunting wishes!
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