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Rock My Resume: Henri Apollon
February 8, 2012 at 4:27 pm #152426
- I want my resume reviewed because I applied to over 170 jobs within the last 3 years and only got 2 interviews, none for the 170 government jobs to which I applied. I currently have 2 referrals and 20 eligible-not-selected applications. I can get no further than that. Something in my resume is not working. I also have my own small email group where I forward information to family, friends and associates about how to increase their chances of getting new jobs. Currently, out of 20 people, 7 in my email group are unemployed. 6 signed up for GovLoop and they all want their resumes rocked. So I would like to help them too!!
- I am currently employed but looking for a government job.
- I have already submitted 15 resumes with cover letters in the past 4 weeks. I only received receipts. No contact.
- I can’t get an interview. Usually, I am not within the top qualified group. I also think my resume doesn’t highlight my value. I made some changes using the tips and should obtain a government position or at least an interview.
- Links: https://my.usajobs.gov/GetJob/ViewDetails/306796100
- Links: https://my.usajobs.gov/GetJob/ViewDetails/308124300
February 9, 2012 at 9:39 pm #152449
We’re glad you got the process started! It looks like you might have updated a resume based on the tip sheet in the instructions (https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions). If so, could you please upload the version prior to that? It’s helpful for our reviewers to see where you started and where you’re at for an effective review. Once you reply and include that, and tag your post “Edit1” (like you did “Resume” and “Submitter”), we’ll get you in the queue for a review!
February 9, 2012 at 9:53 pm #152446
Thanks for replying so quickly Steve!! I uploaded it my prior resume.
February 9, 2012 at 9:59 pm #152444
Thanks, Henri. You’re now in the queue (should be for this month)!
February 14, 2012 at 2:38 am #152442
March 2, 2012 at 9:43 pm #152439
I was thinking about completing my resume again. I added a new updated resume that resembles the resume builder.
March 6, 2012 at 2:38 pm #152437
Using my Edit2 Resume, which is attached in a previous reply, I have obtained a superior qualified position for a Generalist, Office Automation Support position recently. It is a GS7 and pays about 13% less than what I currently make at Step 1. I was reading last night that many positions will usually commence at Step 1 of the Grade. At my current salary, I am around GS7 Step 6. I also qualify for GS-9 because of my experience and education. Would an employer be willing to at least match my current salary, or would I be relegated to GS7 Step 1. Either way I would be happy to get my foot in the door, but my current obligations require a salary position in the GS-9 Bracket. When I am successful with the interview and obtain the position, would the hiring team take that into consideration? Please see the reply I received yesterday below:
Department of the Treasury
Internal Revenue Service
Human Capital Office
Employment, Talent & Security
Delegated Examining Unit
STAFF SUPPORT ASSISTANT (OFFICE AUTOMATION)
Dear HENRI APOLLON:
Thank you for your interest in employment with the Internal Revenue Service. This is a Notice of Rating. This is not a job offer.
Your application for the STAFF SUPPORT ASSISTANT (OFFICE AUTOMATION), 0303 & 07
position was received and processed in accordance with the Office of Personnel Management (OPM) guidelines. Based upon your application, we are pleased to inform you that you have met the basic qualification requirements as follows:
You are rated as follows:
Rating: SUPERIOR QUALIFIED (Category A)
Eligible Grades: 07
Veteran’s Status: NOT A VET
NOTE: Applicants placed in the SUPERIOR QUALIFIED category will be given first consideration. You will be receiving correspondence via e-mail within the next 2 weeks informing you of the next step in the application process.
March 8, 2012 at 3:47 am #152435
Didn’t get the job because of veteran preference.
March 27, 2012 at 12:45 pm #152433
Henri, the first thought I have is that you may be applying to positions that are not directly related to your interests and abilities. Although 170 applications in 3 years may not seem like a lot, I wonder how close together those applications happened. In other words, did you apply for 100 in 2 months and then wait a while? Bottom line is this: when applying for positions, it is ALWAYS about quality over quantity. The stat the proves this to me is you interview to application ratio: 2/170.
Your resume looks good and there are only two suggestions I want to make: tighten your summary and use the modified chronological format.
The Summary section of your resume is your opportunity to create a lens through which employers will read your resume. Give them something direct and to the point that will focus their attention on what it is they are about to read. Here is a good example:
“Program analyst with three years of project experience working on teams implementing community development programs, grant writing, and data analysis. Business and organizational development expert with first-hand experience of the Congressional appropriations process and knowledge of effective strategic management practices.”
A “modified chronological” resume is a combination of the functional and chronological resumes and has subsections focused on the skills sets the employer has said they need.
Strategic Planning and Policy Development
- Develop strategic plan for new one-person career development office, monitor program budget, and serve on Executive Committee for school that has grown by 80% in 3 years.
- Identify career development needs of 450 MPA, MPP, and PhD students, implement appropriate programs and services, and offer support to 3200 alumni. Approximately 95% of all alumni are employed six months after graduation.
- Establish systems to ensure seamless coordination with Student Disability Services, Counseling Services, and International Services Office to help clients with special physical, mental, emotional, and legal needs.
- Evaluate financial aid process for graduate students and collaborate with upper management to review and develop process to decrease waiting time to receive confirmation.
Communications and Recruitment
- Develop employer outreach strategy and marketing plan, requiring relationship and network building in all sectors and publication of the first brochure sent to over 5,000 contacts around the world.
- Customize and administer, in conjunction with director, the web-based career management system, which gives student and alumni 24-hour access to job and internship announcements, an event calendar, employer contacts, and career-related documents.
That kind of bullet point pulls together the skill sets he used (developing, implementing, creating), what/who/how/why he did these things, and his accomplishments. And it focuses the employer’s attention on those skills sets the employ said it needed.
Also, you need to look at your descriptions from the perspective of the person reading your resume and ask yourself these questions: “So what? Is this what I need?”
Avoid using verbs like conduct, perform, administer, support, assist, maintain, or the really old and tired phrase “responsibilities included.” Those are really passive verbs and don’t give you nearly as much credit as you deserve.
Finally, it is important that the last sub-section of every position description be a “Key Accomplishments” section. Federal HR professionals like to see a section that highlights you key accomplishments for every position. These accomplishments can be awards, recognitions, commendations, and even a retelling of those things your mentioned in the sub-sections above the Key Accomplishments.
April 10, 2012 at 9:35 pm #152431
We hope you found this service helpful! Since we offer this service for free, we just ask that participants post their newly made-over resumes for all to see and learn from (step 10! https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions). It is a really valuable resources for others trying to update their own resumes to have a couple great samples to use.
We’d really appreciate it if you could update your resume based on Paul’s feedback and post to this discussion!
July 10, 2012 at 4:34 pm #152429
Good afternoon Paul,
I haven’t looked at this for several months. I appreciate the feedback. I had been working on my resume in a different way after going to some seminars and reading up on federal resume information some more. But I realize that the chronological not only condenses and focuses my resume, but that the profile is extremely important at focusing the HR Specialists eyes while answering the KSAs and strategically placing keywords for the position so that I get past the computer. I will also make more use of the Key accomplishments section so that my resume pops.
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