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Rock My Resume: Jacob Hoots
June 23, 2011 at 5:32 pm #133791
- Why do you want your resume reviewed?
I’m looking for feedback that will help me obtain interviews for positions in agencies that provide basic social services. My experience is strongest in HR and management analysis, and I think my resume gets that across fairly effectively. However, I am interested in transitioning to a career, which is more directly involved in the delivery of public service programs. I have tried to communicate in my objective statement an interest in leveraging my HR, general administrative, and analysis skills to improve public programs. I’m interested in feedback on the objective statement and how to more effectively structure my resume to achieve that objective.
- What is your current situation (employed, seeking, etc.)?
I am employed.
- Where are you in the process (submitted resumes, applied for jobs, etc.)?
I have applied for a handful of jobs.
- What’s the main issue you’re encountering?
I’ve made the cert for several jobs, but have not yet been called to interview.
- Can you share 1 link to a job you’re interested in applying for?
July 8, 2011 at 1:56 am #133801
Jacob, nice resume. You have a ton of great experience and I do think you will go far.
One thing I want you to think about when you apply for future positions is what it would be like to read through your resume as an HR professional. You have a TON of information in here that, while impressive, does not relate to the position you sent. The way present the information is not consistent and a bit confusing.
Also, the way you describe all your experiences and accomplishments is good, but it doesn’t directly relate to the position at hand (the one you gave as an example). The resume you sent us probably was a general resume, but I want to emphasize how crucially important it is to write the descriptions of your experience to match exactly what the employer wants and to do it in such a way as to be brutally obvious.
For example, the first three bullet points under your NIH Management Analyst position are impressive, but they do not directly relate to the HUD position, and if they do, the employer will not spend time finding the connections. In the attached PDF of the HUD position, I have boxed important skill verbs and underlined in blue those things the employer needs you to do using the skills verbs. Some of the verbs are collect, analyze, review, represent, and develop. On your resume, you have coordinate (which is good, but I don’t see it in the job description), provide leadership, and develop (one of their sought after verbs). Your bullet points then go into a lot of great detail that HUD probably won’t recognize or care about. You can get more info on what the employer wants by looking at the questionnaire as well.
I do really like your subheadings under the PMF though (Management Analysis, Budgeting/Fiscal Management), but none of these appear in the HUD job. I tried to give you an example of how I think you could sub-categorize your experiences according to what the organization wants. For each of the bullet points, you would describe those things that relate to each sub-category (obviously, I didn’t rewrite anything, just used the text you had there originally). This style, I think is cleaner and helps the employer easily see how your prior/current experience directly relates.
The bottom line, though, is that you tell them exactly what they want to know in an obvious way.
I used track changes on the attached Word document to show some of the other things I suggest you do to make your resume even more impressive.
July 12, 2011 at 6:33 pm #133799
Wow! Thank you for your thorough review and thoughtful advice.
You hit the nail on the head when you said I should customize my resume to each vacancy. It is a general resume, and I need to revise it on the fly to address the desired skills and experiences in the vacancy announcements. I haven’t, and it might explain why I make it onto the certificate of eligibles, but don’t get calls. (Although, I did recently land a phone interview!)
You gave me some great ideas for how to customize the resume for the vacancy announcement I included in my post. I really appreciate that help since my interest is transitioning into a position that has more direct involvement in programs, and I have been struggling with how to rework my resume for that purpose. Capturing the key words in announcements and reusing those as headings for relevant bullets in my resume will improve my success rate.
July 26, 2011 at 10:00 am #133797
Good to know those tips were helpful. And congrats on getting the phone interview. Seeing as it has been 2 weeks since you posted this note, I hope you have moved well beyond that stage or at least that the interview went well. Good luck with everything!
August 4, 2011 at 12:54 pm #133794
Thanks Paul. I got a second phone interview (for a different vacancy) and I’m hoping to be invited in for a second round soon!
I finished making changes to my resume using your very good advice. The update is attached.
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