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Rock My Resume: Jasmine
February 21, 2012 at 11:25 pm #153865
- Why do you want your resume reviewed?
Current Federal employee who wants to switch career fields. I have applied to over 100 federal positions and had about 4 interviews.
- What is your current situation (employed, seeking, etc.)?
Full time employed and seeking to switch careers
- Where are you in the process (submitted resumes, applied for jobs, etc.)?
I have submitted resumes and applied for jobs, still actively seeking
- What’s the main issue you’re encountering? getting a lot of eligible but not referred
- Can you share 1 link to a job you’re interested in applying for?https://my.usajobs.gov/GetJob/ViewDetails/307256900
I have both my USA jobs and regular resume here.
- Why do you want your resume reviewed?
February 22, 2012 at 11:02 pm #153875
Here is my edited resume.
February 23, 2012 at 6:12 pm #153873
Glad you submitted your resume! Thanks for following our new process – you’re now in the queue for a professional review!
April 22, 2012 at 5:12 am #153871
Andrea Boulanger LoweParticipant
Thanks for submitting your resume!
It looks as though you have a wealth of great experience. I’d like to help you by making it clearer to prospective employers of why you would be a good match, which in your case is crucial as you are seeking to make a career change.
1) I looked at the vacancy announcement and your resume and could not immediately see the skills and abilities the position asks for. The way your experiences are written, it doesn’t directly relate to the position at hand. I want to emphasize how crucially important it is to write the descriptions of your experience to match exactly what the employer wants and to do it in such a way as to be very obvious.
2) Because you plan on making a career change, I would suggest a summary statement at the beginning of your resume. The Summary section is your opportunity to create a lens through which employers will read your resume. Give them something direct and to the point that will focus their attention on what it is they are about to read. You might want to keep it to 3-4 lines.
Here is a good example:
“Program analyst with three years of project experience working on teams implementing community development programs, grant writing, and data analysis. Business and organizational development expert with first-hand experience of the Congressional appropriations process and knowledge of effective strategic management practices.”
Yours could go something like this:
Data analyst with 7 years of federal government experience seeking to utilize ____, ___, and ____ skills to make a career change with a focus on budget analysis. (Obviously jazz it up more.)
If you possess any of the skills listed in the “Specialized Experience” section of the vacancy announcement, this is where you would plug those in.
3) You’re going to want to reduce the information you provide for each of your positions. Your current resume is more of a “master” resume that lists everything you have done. That unfortunately won’t work for employers who are trying to quickly see if you meet their qualifications; the way your resume is written it is as though you are asking them to figure you out which they don’t have time for.
4) You’ll want to write in bullets rather than mini paragraphs. Bullets make it easier to read by giving the eye a rest and bolding (or using all caps) with a keyword gives the bullet focus. Here is an example:
– REPORTING: Developed and prepared weekly, monthly, quarterly, semi-annual
and annual reports using financial, census and performance data for management and executive review
I would recommend keeping it to about 3-7 bullets for each position. These should highlight skills that are relevant to the job you are applying to.
5) Have another section called Key Accomplishments where you have a bulleted list of 1-3 statements. The candidate who clearly shows how their work added value at past positions will appear most attractive. Accomplishments are all that separate you from other equally qualified candidates. I noticed that in your revised resume you did add this section but I think you could add a bit more to them.
If you don’t share how your work affected an organization or how your output was used, they won’t get the full picture. They could be left asking ―So What! After you write each bullet point, ask yourself that question—―So What? What’s the end of the story? And whenever possible, quantify your accomplishments.
Sometimes it’s very hard to come up with an achievement for a bullet point, or you may not have specific percentages of growth or effectiveness. In place of measurable accomplishments, give as much detail as you can. If you used a specific software or theory mention it. Did you consult with secondary AND primary resources for your research? What was the title and purpose of the conference you organized? Were your foreign language abilities necessary to complete the task?
A good tool for writing quality position descriptions is the CAR method:
C = Context
A = Action
R = Result
For example, in your resume you mention that you were designated to work on a special data quality project with a team. What skills did you use? What were the results?
6) Take a highlighter to the vacancy announcement and identify the most important skills and abilities listed and use those words in your resume as often as possible. By using what the employer identified as the most important aspects of the position, you are giving them exactly what they want. Your resume should convey how your experiences and education are well-suited to the position by using their language. Think of the position announcement as a way to translate your resume into the employer’s language. If you have experience managing events and the position requires someone to ―organize events—you use ―organize events on your resume.
7) In your education section, make sure to spell out your degree “Bachelor of Art, May 2005
With your graduate certificate, spell out JPSM
Best of luck with your job search!
April 24, 2012 at 5:45 pm #153869
We hope you found this service helpful! Since we offer this service for free, we just ask that participants post their newly made-over resumes for all to see and learn from (step 10! https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions). It is a really valuable resources for others trying to update their own resumes to have a couple great samples to use. We’d really appreciate it if you could update your resume based on Andrea’s feedback and post to this discussion!
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