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"Rock My Resume: Mitchell S. Wallace"
March 24, 2012 at 7:48 pm #156957
I will graduate in may with an undergrad degree in political science. I have always wanted to work in government and hope to enlist help in doing so.
- Why do you want your resume reviewed?
Seeking employment in the DC area.
- What is your current situation (employed, seeking, etc.)?
I have submitted resumes to two government agencies as well as a research institute.
- Where are you in the process (submitted resumes, applied for jobs, etc.)?
Lack of response from the governmental agencies.
- What’s the main issue you’re encountering?
- Can you share 1 link to a job you’re interested in applying for?
March 27, 2012 at 6:24 pm #156976
We're excited you got the Rock Your Resume Process started! Looks like you've taken care of steps 1-5. Once you complete steps 6 and 7 (https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions), we can get you in the queue for a professional review! Just reply to this discussion with your "Edit1" when you're ready.
April 5, 2012 at 10:08 pm #156973
April 6, 2012 at 4:58 pm #156971
Thanks for editing and uploading! However, I can't seem to open the file. Could you try again to upload a word doc version? Once I can get it open, we'll get you in the queue.
April 8, 2012 at 4:28 pm #156967
Hope this helps
April 10, 2012 at 4:47 pm #156965
That one works - you're now in the queue for a review! We'd just ask for your patience as we're a bit backed up at the moment. One of our reviewers will reply to this discussion with feedback, once they've reviewed your resume!
June 10, 2012 at 6:39 pm #156962
Andrea Boulanger LoweParticipant
Thanks for submitting your resume! To make your resume even more effective, here are some tips.
1. You’ll want to make sure you take care of the federal compliance information which includes the following:
- Soc sec #, veteran’s preference, country of citizenship, availability, desired locations, and objective (the position name, agency, vacancy number)
- Within each work experience, make sure to include the hours per week that you worked, salary, supervisor’s name and phone number, and whether or not they can contact that supervisor.
2. I looked at the vacancy announcement and your resume and could not immediately see the skills and abilities the position asks for. The way your experiences are written, it doesn’t directly relate to the position at hand. I want to emphasize how crucially important it is to write the descriptions of your experience to match exactly what the employer wants and to do it in such a way as to be very obvious.
3. I suggest that your summary should be tailored to the position for which you are applying. To tailor it to the specific position, read the section under QUALIFICATIONS REQUIRED some other federal vacancy announcements might call the section HOW YOU WILL BE EVALUATED). This is THE section that you want to make sure you tailor your resume to. You must speak in the language of the employer. The Summary section of your resume is your opportunity to create a lens through which employers will read your resume. Give them something direct and to the point that will focus their attention on what it is they are about to read. Your summary doesn’t mention anything about human resources experience and they require at least 3 years of it. Also, resumes shouldn’t include the use of pronouns.
You’ll want to keep the summary to 3-4 lines. As you are writing your summary, ask yourself “is this relevant to this specific position?”
Here’s an example: “Program analyst with three years of project experience working on teams implementing community development programs, grant writing, and data analysis. Business and organizational development expert with first-hand experience of the Congressional appropriations process and knowledge of effective strategic management practices.”
4. You don’t do your positions justice. For some of them I don’t really know what skills you used and whether you have been successful. For example, when you mention that you planned and created a personal finance class for new refugees, what skills did you use? What was the result? Did it ever get taught? Is it still being taught? You want to steer away from just writing out your duties but make them into accomplishment statements. What value did you add by being in that position? I have attached a handout called Anatomy of a Bullet that will hopefully show you how to improve your resume. Also, bullets shouldn’t have a period at the end of them.
You could also consider adding a keyword right before the accomplishment statement to give the bullet focus. Here is an example:
- PUBLIC SPEAKING: Presented research and events related to terrorism to directors, research staff and interns (did you use PowerPoint, did you receive positive feedback? How many people were in the audience?)
I would recommend keeping it to about 3-7 bullets for this position. These should highlight skills that are relevant to the job you are applying to.
The candidate who clearly shows how their work added value at past positions will appear most attractive. Accomplishments are all that separate you from other equally qualified candidates.
If you don’t share how your work affected an organization or how your output was used, they won’t get the full picture. They could be left asking ―So what! After you write each bullet point, ask yourself that question—―So what? What’s the end of the story? And whenever possible, quantify your accomplishments.
Sometimes it’s very hard to come up with an achievement for a bullet point, or you may not have specific percentages of growth or effectiveness. In place of measurable accomplishments, give as much detail as you can. A good tool for writing quality position descriptions is the CAR method:
C = Context
A = Action
R = Result
The best resumes describe job tasks, skills, and concrete accomplishments accurately and completely while still being succinct. Effective use of language is the key to conveying your marketable talents to employers. Depict your experience clearly, so they will understand exactly what you learned and what you’ll bring to the position you are applying for.
Good: Wrote press releases
Better: Wrote press releases about upcoming events to enhance publicity and increase participation
Best: Wrote 15 press releases detailing upcoming events which were sent to 100 local media outlets to raise publicity and attract up to 2,000 community members to a movie premiere
*Note that you do not need all “Best” descriptive lines! Include a mix of “Better” and a few “Best” and you will be in good shape!
5. Take a highlighter to the vacancy announcement and identify the most important skills and abilities listed and use those words in your resume as often as possible. By using what the employer identified as the most important aspects of the position, you are giving them exactly what they want. Your resume should convey how your experiences and education are well-suited to the position by using their language. Think of the position announcement as a way to translate your resume into the employer’s language. If you have experience managing events and the position requires someone to ―organize events—you use ―organize events on your resume.
6. In your education section list it out as the following:
North Carolina Central University, Durham, NC
Bachelor of Art (or was it Science), August 2012
Major: Political Science [if your GPA is over a 3.0 you could put that here]
7. It looks as though you held some leadership positions in your activities. The Duke & NCCU Community Program position looks interesting, but you don’t say anything about it. Put a few bullets under it like you would a job. You won’t need to put bullets under each of the activities just the ones of note. In all of the positions in this category add in the timeline of when you were a member or volunteer. Put this section after your Professional Experience section.
8. Add in a Computer Skills section. If you know Microsoft Word, Excel, PowerPoint list them as well as any other of interest (Photoshop, etc), but keep it relevant to the job you are applying to.
Best of luck with your job search!
June 11, 2012 at 2:47 pm #156960
We hope you found this service helpful! Since we offer this service for free, we just ask that participants post their newly made-over resumes for all to see and learn from (step 10! https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions). It's a really valuable resource for others trying to update their own resumes to have a couple great samples to use. We'd really appreciate it if, when you update your resume based on Andrea's feedback, you would post to this discussion!
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