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Rock My Resume Patricia T
February 1, 2012 at 1:47 am #151604
Thank you for having this great service. I have been applying and don't get the positions. I would like to see if it is my resume.
I am currently unemployed and seeking Federal employment. I have submitted a lot of resumes and applied to jobs with no response back.
I have 1 resume made with USAJobs and 1 resume for non-government positions.
I am attaching a copy of my resumes and 1 cover letter for your review.
2 examples of jobs I have applied to:
Let me know if you have any questions.
Thank you again.
February 1, 2012 at 2:37 pm #151624
Hi Patricia - Be sure to attend our Rock Your Resume webinar tomorrow where you can learn more from our expert reviewers: https://event.on24.com/eventRegistration/EventLobbyServlet?target=registration.jsp&eventid=397659&sessionid=1&key=EEAF62023458C76CFB61FD7F23E94FBE&sourcepage=register
February 1, 2012 at 5:58 pm #151622
Hi Andrew, Thank you for the information. I signed up for it.
February 2, 2012 at 11:32 pm #151620
I missed the webinar today. The link shows there is one tomorrow also. Is this correct?
February 3, 2012 at 1:01 pm #151618
Hi Patricia - We'll be sending out an archive version and posting it here. - Andy
February 9, 2012 at 8:42 pm #151616
Thanks for submitting your resume! We have revamped our process for resume reviews, which you can find here: https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions. It looks like you've already covered steps 1-5, so if you could just get through the next two steps, we'll get you into the queue for a professional review! We think this new process will help ensure you get the most effective review.
March 14, 2012 at 1:35 am #151613
Attached is my edited version.
March 15, 2012 at 4:47 pm #151611
Thanks, Patricia - with that, you're in the queue for a free professional review. We'd just ask for your patience, as we've had a big influx of resumes following our recent webinar. One of our professional reviewers will reply right to this discussion thread with feedback, once they've had a chance to review.
May 19, 2012 at 2:39 am #151608
Andrea Boulanger LoweParticipant
Thanks for submitting your resume! It looks like you’re making great progress. To make it an even more effective federal resume, here are some tips.
FYI – the position I’m referencing is the first link you sent (Army Medical Command, Office Automation Assistant).
1) You’ll want to make sure you take care of the federal compliance information which includes the following:
- Soc sec #, veteran’s preference, country of citizenship, availability, desired locations, and objective (the position name, agency, vacancy number)
- Within each work experience, make sure to include the hours per week that you worked, salary, supervisor’s name and phone number, and whether or not they can contact that supervisor
2) Rather than just having the word “Administrative” at the top I would suggest calling it a “Career Summary” and tailoring it to the specific position. The information that you provided in that section looks good and reads well, but to tailor it to the specific position, take it a step further and read the duties section in the vacancy announcement. This is THE section that you want to make sure you tailor your resume to. (In some other vacancy announcements it might be the qualifications required section.) You must speak in the language of the employer. The Summary section of your resume is your opportunity to create a lens through which employers will read your resume. Give them something direct and to the point that will focus their attention on what it is they are about to read. You’ll want to keep it to 3-4 bullets. As you are writing your summary, ask yourself “is this relevant to this specific position?” In your last bullet you would want to mention your typing speed as that is listed as a key requirement (at least 40 wpm) in the vacancy announcement.
3) Rather than just listing your key skills, I would rather see real live examples of your work embedded in your experience. I’ll show you what I mean.
For your bullets you could pick a keyword that gives focus to the content in the bullet. For example, your first bullet in the first position listed it could look like this…
OFFICE MANAGEMENT: Independently performed office duties such as managing files, handling business correspondence and travel arrangements in a fast paced office.
4) After your first set of bullets for your position, consider adding a section called KEY ACCOMPLISHMENTS that includes 2-5 accomplishments you had in that position. Did you improve any systems or processes? Make things run more efficient? Ever get commended for good work? Were you ever known as the “go to” person for specific things?
5) Since you worked at Plastic Products two different times I would recommend that you combine them so that you don’t repeat almost everything that you did again. You could list it like this:
Plastic Products, Inc. – Anytown, AW February 2012 – Present and
Operations Assistant/Secretary/Accounting Assistant August 2006 – March 2010
6) Rather than repeating the exact same bullets from job to job, try to make them a little more unique. Also, because you list your computer skills in your summary at the top, you won’t need to have a bullet addressing those skills for each of your jobs.
I have attached a handout called Anatomy of a Bullet that will hopefully show you how to improve your resume. I would recommend keeping it to about 3-7 bullets for each position. These should highlight skills that are relevant to the job you are applying to.
The candidate who clearly shows how their work added value at past positions will appear most attractive. Accomplishments are all that separate you from other equally qualified candidates.
If you don’t share how your work affected an organization or how your output was used, they won’t get the full picture. They could be left asking ―So What! After you write each bullet point, ask yourself that question—―So What? What’s the end of the story? And whenever possible, quantify your accomplishments.
Sometimes it’s very hard to come up with an achievement for a bullet point, or you may not have specific percentages of growth or effectiveness. In place of measurable accomplishments, give as much detail as you can. A good tool for writing quality position descriptions is the CAR method:
C = Context
A = Action
R = Result
7) Take a highlighter to the vacancy announcement and identify the most important skills and abilities listed and use those words in your resume as often as possible. By using what the employer identified as the most important aspects of the position, you are giving them exactly what they want. Your resume should convey how your experiences are well-suited to the position by using their language. Think of the position announcement as a way to translate your resume into the employer’s language. If you have experience managing events and the position requires someone to ―organize events—you use ―organize events on your resume.
Best of luck with your job search!
May 21, 2012 at 1:41 pm #151606
We hope you found this service helpful! Since we offer this service for free, we just ask that participants post their newly made-over resumes for all to see and learn from (step 10! https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions). It's a really valuable resource for others trying to update their own resumes to have a couple great samples to use. We'd really appreciate it if, when you update your resume based on Andrea's feedback, you would post to this discussion!
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