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February 24, 2012 at 6:01 pm #154186
- Why do you want your resume reviewed? I want my resume reviewed in order to receive input and expert advice that will allow me to modify my resume and allow me the opportunity to make a career move from local government to state or federal.
- What is your current situation (employed, seeking, etc.)? I am currently employed, however I am actively seeking a new career.
- Where are you in the process (submitted resumes, applied for jobs, etc.)? I have applied to a number of federal and state jobs.
- What’s the main issue you’re encountering? My main issue is that I am not confident about the effectiveness and target audience of my resume. I know I have the skills, experience and attitude, but I do not feel that I am effectively selling myself.
- Can you share 1 link to a job you’re interested in applying for? http://jobs.spb.ca.gov/wvpos/moreinfo_s_pf.cfm?recno=478501
February 24, 2012 at 6:34 pm #154215
We're excited you got the Rock Your Resume Process started! Looks like you've taken care of steps 1-5. Once you complete steps 6 and 7 (https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions), we can get you in the queue for a professional review! Just reply to this discussion with your "Edit1" when you're ready.
February 24, 2012 at 7:08 pm #154212
February 24, 2012 at 7:37 pm #154210
Thanks for submitting your updated version, Christopher. You're now in the queue for a professional review.
March 10, 2012 at 1:13 am #154207
http://www.usajobs.gov/GetJob/ViewDetails/311199900 new job posting and updated resume
March 13, 2012 at 6:47 pm #154205
Thanks - we'll make sure this is the version that gets reviewed.
March 13, 2012 at 6:54 pm #154203
Any idea of where I am at in the queue?
March 13, 2012 at 7:01 pm #154201
We're a bit backed up at the moment, but either Paul or Camille should be reviewing yours by next month.
March 13, 2012 at 7:13 pm #154199
Thanks, I will have to update the job posting when the time comes.
April 21, 2012 at 7:31 pm #154197
Andrea Boulanger LoweParticipant
It looks like you’re making great progress on your resume! To make it even more effective as a federal resume here are some tips.
1) You’ll want to make sure you take care of the federal compliance information which includes the following:
- Soc sec #, veteran’s preference, country of citizenship, availability, desired locations, and objective (the position name, agency, vacancy number)
- Within each work experience, make sure to include the hours per week that you worked, salary, supervisor’s name and phone number, and whether or not they can contact that supervisor
2) Your summary does look good and reads well, but to tailor it to the specific position, take it a step further and read the 5 paragraphs in the vacancy announcement (if printed out, it’s on page 3 or under the section in the QUALIFICATIONS REQUIRED and then keep reading until you see the opening sentence of “The Occupational Questionnaire measure your ability to demonstrate the following competencies.”) This is THE section that you want to make sure you tailor your resume to. You must speak in the language of the employer. The Summary section of your resume is your opportunity to create a lens through which employers will read your resume. Give them something direct and to the point that will focus their attention on what it is they are about to read. You might want to cut it down to 3-4 lines.
3) The paragraphs under your titles are very text heavy. In fact, I would avoid paragraphs all together in any resume. A study just came out that said recruiters spend only 6 seconds on average glancing at a resume to see if they’ll give it a further read. To be honest, when I was a recruiter, I hated paragraphs! Paragraphs make it really difficult to pick out the key information they are searching for. Bullets make it easier by giving the eye a rest and bolding (or using all caps) with a keyword gives the bullet focus. Here is an example from your resume:
- GRANT MANAGEMENT: Oversee grant applications, activities, projects/program, reporting requirements and monitor federal grants. Develop and review grant activities for eligibility criteria
- MONITORING: Conduct monitoring reviews and self assessments of grant performance objectives
- REPORTING: Prepare written reports that incorporate analysis of data and methodologies utilized to meet performance objectives
- Other keywords in that paragraph might be POLICY & PROCEDURE, COLLABORATION, BUDGET, and PERSONNEL.
- Shoot for 3-7 bullets like this and try to tailor it to the keywords of the vacancy announcement as much as possible.
- Other thoughts: insert # of grant staff, insert the actual number rather than spell it out which will help make it stand out (e.g. 15 code enforcement officers).
4) Key Accomplishments: You did these well. Typically I would say stick to 1-3 bullets in this list, but because your current position is most relevant, then more is fine.
5) The rest of your experience: I would suggest cutting the length. You acquired great experience and skills but pick and choose the ones that are most relevant to HUD and what they are seeking in this vacancy.
6) Education section:
- spell out your degree:
- Master of Business Administration, May 2007 (the rest of your resume writes out the month so keep it formatted the same throughout)
- Emphasis: Leadership & Management
- Same with your undergrad: Bachelor of Art/Science (?), December 1994
7) Additional information section:
- insert the year that you attained your certifications
- spell out MCSE
- Any volunteering/community service or associations that you belong to? Include those!
Best of luck to you in your job search!
April 24, 2012 at 5:42 pm #154195
We hope you found this service helpful! Since we offer this service for free, we just ask that participants post their newly made-over resumes for all to see and learn from (step 10! https://www.govloop.com/group/rockyourresume/page/instructions). It is a really valuable resources for others trying to update their own resumes to have a couple great samples to use. We'd really appreciate it if you could update your resume based on Andrea's feedback and post to this discussion!
May 9, 2012 at 4:23 pm #154193
Thank you for taking the time to review my resume and provide positive and constructive feedback. Job hunting is a full time job on top of the job I already have. I am currently re-working my resume based on your advice and expert opinion. My goal is to get a "Best Qualified" rating and a message that I have been referred to the hiring manager. With a little luck and a lot of perseverance, I will realize my goal.
Thank you again!
May 9, 2012 at 4:24 pm #154191
As soon as I have a version I am happy with, I will gladly complete step 10. This is a great service! Thank you!
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