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Rock My Resume: Shawn Flynn
September 8, 2011 at 1:19 am #140746
Why do you want your resume reviewed? I would like to have my resume reviewed to see if it is outdated, and also to ensure it targets my goal of seeking employment with the government.
What is your current situation? I am employed as an analyst with a global leader in market research.
Where are you in the process? I have been submitting several resumes to USA Jobs for analyst & economist positions. I rarely get referred, and when I do, I am not selected.
What’s the main issue you’re encountering? I seem to receive minimal success and generate little interest with the hiring agents when submitting applications.
Can you share 1 link to a job you’re interested in applying for? http://jobview.usajobs.gov/getjob.aspx?JobID=96334509&GoBackURL=https%3a%2f%2fmy.usajobs.gov%2fJobFile%2fJobFile.aspx
October 20, 2011 at 8:18 pm #140767
Hey Shawn – With the USAJOBS revamp, looks like the jobs link is broken. Do you happen to have a link to a new job that you could share here? Thanks – Andy (GovLoop Community Manager and RYR Coordinator)
October 25, 2011 at 2:34 pm #140765
Hey Andy – thanks for following up, and yes I do have a link for a new job. Sorry for the delay, I’ve been offline for a few days. Here you go: https://my.usajobs.gov/GetJob/ViewDetails/301361400
If the link doesn’t work, here’s the job announcement number: DE-12-BOS-BLS-10
October 30, 2011 at 11:40 pm #140762
Thank you for the updated link and thank you for participating in the Rock Your Résumé program! I’m honored to review your résumé and hope my suggestions will help you improve your résumé so you can land your dream job!
Your résumé starts with your education, which is great if you are creating a curriculum vitae and applying in academia, but where it is a federal job you are pursuing, I would recommend you begin with a headline and profile summary that is directly aligned to the position you are applying for, i.e., Economist. I believe you are qualified, but your résumé is not targeting the job announcement. It is also missing the critical “federal” detail that is required, supervisors, their phone, may/may not contact, # hours worked per week, and salary. I realize you may have left that off for the purpose of this review, but be sure it is on the résumé you are submitting.
The headline, profile summary, and first two “sections” on the traditional résumé are the most critical in terms of capturing and keeping the attention of the reader. Does your résumé pass the 5-second skim test? When creating a traditional résumé using a Word document, it is important to address the needs of the employer—quickly! Leave off the old fashioned, generic “objective” and replace it with a professional summary full of the KEYwords specific to the job announcement that will QUICKLY capture the reader’s (employer’s) attention and make them think this is exactly who we are looking for!
Think of those first few seconds like reading the title to a book. Will the “title” to your book compel the reader to open the book and read your story? If your headline (brand) and the first one-third of the page (before the first fold) are visually appealing, compelling, and addresses the needs of the employer, it should capture his/her attention. Then, if it flows with qualifications and telling your story, it will be easy to keep his/her attention because you have attracted their interest. Now they will want to know more about you and what you can do to solve their problems and address their needs. If you combine your branding elements with qualifications and tell a story, this approach will get you much further…faster…in the hiring process.
Begin with your headline, then a brief powerful 3 to 4-line profile summary, incorporating keywords from the job announcement. Create the Qualifications or Professional Summary to demonstrate your knowledge, skills, and abilities—qualifications. Then craft a Core Competencies section using keywords from the announcement along with your expertise and skills.
There are three purposes for the Qualifications or Professional Summary and Core Competencies sections on the résumé (and you can use different titles if necessary):
- Aligning you/your résumé with the job announcement—branding and outlining qualifications.
- Keyword optimizing—copying these sections into the online résumé builders.
- Most important, when you interview for the position—you and the hiring official will have great talking points that are specific to the job announcement!
As you know, résumés are very subjective. Ask 5 people to review your résumé and you will get 10 opinions. However, I am sharing what has been working for me and my clients for 23 years. I like to “data mine” the announcement to obtain keywords and qualifications. Then I relate your experience, knowledge, and skills to create your brand and story. You can use http://www.Wordle.net to help data mine if you are not familiar with identifying keywords and qualifications. It is a great tool. Just copy and paste the duties and qualifications sections, or even the whole announcement, into http://www.Wordle.net and it will do some of the work for you. It will help to identify the keywords used throughout the announcement. Use those often and relate your experiences to those keywords in your résumé.
To continue sharing what has been working for me and my clients, I create a “career search toolkit.” One of the elements to the toolkit is creating the résumé in three formats. I create a .doc, .txt, and pdf version of the résumé. Each has their strategic purpose. I recommend formatting the .doc file using enhancements such as some color, bold, small caps, centering, bullets, perhaps a drop cap, text box, and possibly a table or graph, depending on the situation, to name a few.
After I complete the final version of the résumé in Word, I create the other two versions—a .txt and a .pdf. Bullets and symbols do not transfer well to online résumé builders so when I create the text file, I replace the “?” and any other symbols with a keyboard symbol such as an asterisk (*), or other keyboard symbol, then use other formatting enhancements that can be done in a text file. I clean up the file then it is ready to be copied into the résumé builder, section by section. You can use the .pdf for uploading as well if the organization allows it.
Another use for the .pdf version, and most important, take several prints with you to give to the interviewer(s). This is one way you can set yourself/résumé apart from all the résumés that look alike—generated from the online résumé builder and possibly word processor-based templates. Be sure to leave the nicely formatted prints with the interviewers and human resources personnel. It will make a big impact when they are choosing who to hire as well.
The following changes to your résumé are suggestions on how I would initially recommend enhancing your résumé based on the job announcement you submitted. NOTE: I would ensure that I knew your skill level with regard to “exceptional, outstanding, expertise, articulate, etc.” to be sure they were not overstated, or understated, then write them accordingly. I would also analyze (or create) your brand and communicate it electronically and on paper. Hopefully, I made the changes to point where you could do the same with the rest of the résumé that doesn’t have the line-by-line changes.
October 31, 2011 at 9:02 pm #140760
Thanks, Shawn. If you make changes to your resume based on Camille’s feedback, you’d be in the running for “Total Resume Makeover” of the month for October. If you can do it by end of the week, I’m making my selection on Friday. – Andy
November 4, 2011 at 1:42 am #140757
Hey Andy – I’ve integrated Camille’s changes to the best of my ability so far, but I’m sure that there is more I can tweak, edit, adjust, etc. Please take a look at what I have and I’ll throw my hat in the ring for the “Total Resume Makeover”. Thanks so much for letting me participate in Rock Your Resume, it’s been a great experience so far! – Shawn
November 4, 2011 at 1:50 am #140755
Hi Camille – all I can say is wow! I’m very impressed with all of the insight and pointers that you provided. I can’t thank you enough. I’ve incorporated most of your suggestions so far, but I know there’s definitely more that I can work on. Andy suggested I get my resume into him by the end of this week because he’s making a selection for the “Total Resume Makeover”, so I’ve given him what I have so far. Thanks again! – Shawn
November 4, 2011 at 5:46 am #140753
This is looking really good, Shawn! Much more of an impact! Let me make a few more suggestions:
Make the next block of text black, rather than gray. You might even add a light gray shading behind it.
De-underline the job announcement.
I really like your achievements, but can you list an achievement where you used your problem-solving and analytical skills?
Can you define some actionable findings?
Under Key Competencies:
Delete “Thorough Knowledge of” CPG. Key Competencies already says you have thorough knowledge.
Delete “Excellent”…same reason as above.
Delete “Understanding of” … same reason above.
Add in more competencies to make it look balanced…how about Analyzing Data, Productivity Analyses
Now that you have the phone #’s in, delete the words Phone number. (noise)
Major contributor of thorough analysis to client engagements
Major contributor of thorough analysis of client engagements.
Use a hard space (Control+shift+space then delete a space) after the word Salary to keep the salary and the # together.
Change the “all paragraph” format to paragraph and a few bullets and to really kick it up, add 2 accomplishments.
To make it even aestheticly pleasing, you could put some gray shading behind each job block before the paragraph and maybe add a page border. 😉 (Sorry, I can’t resist.)
Put the colon right after Salary and tak off .00 USD (no need for the extra “noise”)
Be sure to add in your military awards and achievements, and coursework under education and you will have a darn good, complete federal resume. =)
Thank you for your kind words and promptness in making these changes. I wish you the very best of luck in your career. If you need anything, don’t hesitate to contact me.
November 4, 2011 at 7:31 pm #140751
Hey Shawn – Guess what? I picked yours (okay, okay…I couldn’t decide, so I picked all three of you!). Check it out:
November 9, 2011 at 4:59 pm #140749
Very cool, thanks Andy! I still have more work to do in regards to Camille’s additional feedback, so I will continue working on perfecting my resume. All of the advice I’ve been receiving is coming at a very crucial time for me because on Monday I discovered that my analytic group is being downsized and I’ll be out of a job at the end of the year. Consequently, I will be kicking into overdrive for my resume edits and job applications on the USA jobs website. Thanks again!! – Shawn
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